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VR Draft Feedback

Page history last edited by Benjamin Puninske 8 years, 11 months ago

1) Cover page: YES! 4/4 HIGH SCORE!!!!!!

2) Table of contents looks good.

3) Not yet written.

 

Introduction

There is no sense of urgency in the problem you are conveying. As persuasive as this paragraph is, the problem doesn't seem immanent and something that needs an immediate solution. Try a sentence or two that arise a specific problem that needs to be fixed.

Are there any classroom problems that could ONLY be fixed by VR?

 

Purpose stated well:

"We could make the learning experience that virtual reality technologies offer available to many students that attend Wayne State University by bringing virtual reality devices into the classrooms.  "

 

How do you forecast the rest of the report? Maybe add an overview of the sections to come. 

 

Overall you paint a good picture of how this technology would benefit university education.

 

Anderson's Checklist

Strong: Conveying the benefits of integrating VR.

Weak: Persuading people of a problem. Overviewing the sections to come.

 

Overview of Alternatives 

Solid section. Concise explanations. Generalizes the differences between them.

 

Method

Well written, most aspects of data collection were covered. Any others that you can think of?

 

Do you persuade the reader that this method would produce reliable results?

(Optional) Do you ever talk about each team members qualification? (why they are doing the jobs that are assigned, what experience do they have)

 

Results

Not written

 

Evaluations

Good job working through each criteria, one by one, for each alternative. During any revisions, make sure you keep the congruency. 

 

Each one has examples of occurrences that need to be backed up by your results sections. 

 

Good: Evaluating the alternatives in terms of the criteria. 

Needs Work: Presenting the facts and evidence that is supported in your results section.

 

Conclusion

Not written

 

Recommendations

Not written

 

 

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