Cover Letter:

1.Quick Read: 

• Choppy sentences in first paragraph
• Grammatical Errors  
• Vague Subject Line (who are you specifically addressing?)
• Second paragraph possibly bullet point skills
• Switch third and second paragraphs because third paragraph is very impressive.  
• Work on flow of entire letter
• Key words: innovative, manufacturing, leadership skills, hands on

2.Does is answer the three questions?

• All questions were answered, but they were somewhat vague. Try to be more direct and personal.  Especially with regards to question one.

3.Meets 5 goals

• Goal 1: Doesn't address the exact job you are applying for
• Goal 2: Does demonstrate some knowledge, but be more specific
• Goal 3: Adequately explained why you chose this company
• Goal 4: Explains qualifications well. Try to make them stand out more with bullet points.
• Goal 5: Addresses nest step, as an interview

4.Is it persuasive?

• Very persuasive. Highlighted skills and why you would be a benefit to the company.  Include in the first paragraph a reason why the company would want to hire you.

Mechanics/Grammar

• First sentence of first paragraph is wordy and needs to be revised grammatically.
• Capitalize the word "I've" in second paragraph
• Try not to use contractions 
• Revise first paragraph in general. Make it more concise and easier to read. 

Resume:

1. Initial Scan

• No key words, include them
• Expand on skills learned and how it would benefit the company
• Add more favorable personal qualities that you have developed through your experiences  
• Shows strong technical expertise and supporting abilities but needs to expand on them
• Format differently with more columns possibly 

2. Headings/Audience Analysis 

• This resume is an experiential resume
• Headings are for the most part clear except the bold sub-headings under employment history is confusing 
• The balance is more towards volunteering experiences.  Need to work on being more specific about the skills gained at past jobs and relevant courses in your education section 
• Good audience analysis but was not really conveyed in cover letter or resume.  Identify key words you want to include.

3. Critique Key Sections

• Education Section
• Does not show relevant courses
• Does not highlight courses or range of abilities 
• Does not include any internships, projects, or advanced courses (Review Workshop Requirements)
• Work Experience
• Need to consider expanding and including Knowledge gained, Responsibilities given, and Accomplishments

4. Organization/style/ethics

• Make more of a grid and line things up better
• organize from most to least impressive, you seems to have the opposite
• No ethical issues

Professional Website:

1. Too much white space

2. The pull down tab is a bit hard to locate at first

3. Add a little bit more content on the first page

Usability:

• Post your resume actually on the webpage instead of just a download
• include more content in general
• Re-label Projects 1-3 as what they actually are (ex. building a portfolio)
• Difficult to find Projects webpage