| 
  • If you are citizen of an European Union member nation, you may not use this service unless you are at least 16 years old.

  • You already know Dokkio is an AI-powered assistant to organize & manage your digital files & messages. Very soon, Dokkio will support Outlook as well as One Drive. Check it out today!

View
 

Cover Letter Feedback 1

Page history last edited by Ryan Thai 9 years, 5 months ago

Reviewers:

  • Ryan Thai
  • Owen Pierce
  • Mariela Sanchez

 

Task 1: Cover Letter

 

Pros:

  • Structurally sound
    • Everything flowed neatly.  Well organized.
    • Very straight to the point 
  • Good use of specific related work experience to skill set on paragraph 3 

 

Cons: 

  • Include "Human Resources" department instead of "Internship Department".
    • Most papers go through the Human Resource department
  • A couple grammatical errors 
    • Read it aloud to oneself and errors become noticeable.   
  • Please add "Enclosure: Resume" on the bottom
    • Especially when it comes to job career interviews.  Many will want to see two or more papers at hand. 

 

Task 2: Resume

 

Pros:

  • Good use of white space to spread information evenly

 

Cons:

  • A bit confusing at first glance.    
  • Keep it to one full page
    • Gather the the work experience together and not separate them
      • One "experience" heading and all different job experiences underneath
        • Company name then underneath it the job position 
    • Readers will think it's disorganized or will think you have very few to offer if they are fast readers 
  • Put academic and professional into one category : Education
    • Put more key points underneath 
  • Don't use header format for contact information
    • This will cause unneeded space for the second page
    • Readers will already know your contact information after looking the first page 

 

Task 3 : Professional Webpage

 

Pros:

  • The contact information is well organized
    • Adding an email reply helps feedback without having them call you  

 

Cons:

  • Include the title of the work projects and not just project 1, project 2, project 3
  • Too much white space in the Resume and Cover letter page
    • Add a few pictures to make it stand out
  • Add an "About Me" page
    • Let the readers know about you a bit more 

 

 

Comments (0)

You don't have permission to comment on this page.